Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: Sep 13 2008 08:18 AM · On: Chapter 10

Great chapter

Raf

Reviewer: Addlcove (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 10:35 AM · On: Chapter 10

these chapters are WAY to short :p give us more.

I like that the "sunnydale syndrome" actually makes jessie rationalise what's going on.

Reviewer: bluesnowman (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 10:03 AM · On: Chapter 10

Nicely done.

Reviewer: djhardim (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 08:06 AM · On: Chapter 10

Great.  I think you mean Carrier Pigeon rather than Passenger Pigeon.   Passenger Pigeons are extinct.

Reviewer: dogbertcarroll (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 10

He's definately managed to break Wednesday's shell. Excellent work!

Reviewer: Kaerion (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 03:37 AM · On: Chapter 10

Loving the interaction with Jesse and Willow so far, and with access to Xander's schoolbooks, something tells me that Willow will be up to date on the theory of magic, in no time!

Other than that, this sorta feels like a filler chapter, but I honestly don't mind, since you're taking the time to really fill out the personalities of your characters, which makes for a much better story in the long run, IMHO.

And it's great to see that Xander and Wednesday are staying in touch. I have a feeling that you'll be pairing them up later on (once they're old enough!), which will be totally awesome. And you really can't go wrong with the rest of her family either! I can only remember 2-3 full-length stories that involved the Addams family, other than this one, so I'm really looking forward to seeing what you'll be doing with them later.

Keep up the great work, man!

Reviewer: Warren (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 03:01 AM · On: Chapter 10

Ummm hmmm..." Willow mumbled from where she was reading, already
oblivious to him. Xander just smiled and turned back to his potions
experiment, laughing internally at his redheaded friend.

something dangerous that can challenge Willow and she will have no adult supervision if she tries to take it up after Xander leaves, that sounds scary.

good to see Xander having fun so far with his friends.

"He's on his way back now," Xander said, "Sorry I couldn't send him
back through the floo, but our connection doesn't handle transport.
Costs too much, and I guess it has to be warded heavily for security,
and those cost a lot too."


I can't believe his magical relatives were to cheap to get them wards and a connection to the floo network. at the very least it would make Xander look kindly on them and help protect him and his family.

great story looking forward to your next chapter.

Reviewer: mrpietan (Signed) · Date: Sep 11 2008 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 10

WHERE'S THE ACTION .. more action action action ... Wait .. I'll stop now .. :)

Reviewer: Essex (Anonymous) · Date: Sep 10 2008 10:24 PM · On: Chapter 10

Yet another update! This one seemed a bit short, but makes for a nice slice of life transitional chapter. Good to see that Willow is being herself and getting in some extracurricular studying.

I noticed from your comments that you see the story STARTING a few years down the road. I find it interesting that you consider the story as starting around the time that Buffy arrives in Sunnydale and Voldemort winds up being resurrected (assuming that events progress as they did in canon).

Reviewer: lucifael (Signed) · Date: Sep 10 2008 09:35 PM · On: Chapter 10

As always Ten, absolutely brilliant.

Reviewer: erik (Signed) · Date: Sep 10 2008 07:31 PM · On: Chapter 10

A well done reconnection with old and new.

Thanks

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